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Sloppy Writing 101.13

April 20, 2012 by Suzi

 
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Sloppy Writing 101.13
 
I have such a problem with some words. Read below.
 
-We sat down to do some paperwork and Jim wrinkled up his nose.
-I’d be lucky if I go to some crappy community college.
-I could save up for some two year college. (This occurred right after the above sentence.)
-I’d tell them a good story about some vacation I took there.
 
Obviously the oft repeated word is some. Now I can’t just delete it in all cases, but I need to use a instead–it’s much cleaner. I found 142 occurrences of some in an old FROSTY ms, and quite a few of them can be deleted or replaced.
 
Some would be a good word used to distinguish a character from another by using it in their dialogue, but otherwise I would clean away the others.


5 Comments »

  1. Very true. There are lots of words that we can get rid of that help clean up our writing. This is definitely one of them. :)

  2. PK Hrezo says:

    Yep I use some and just waaay too much. But I clean them up in edits. :)

  3. ilima says:

    Some, just, had, really, that…there are way too many words I overuse.

  4. Melodie says:

    I used to use ‘some’ a lot.
    Now people roll their eyes too much.
    *Sigh*

  5. Rachel Schieffelbein says:

    For me it’s ‘just’ and (for some odd reason) ‘almost.’ Not only did my characters have things ‘almost’ happen to them, they even ‘almost’ felt things. IE: She felt almost crazy. *buries head in hands* How embarrassing.

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