Sloppy Writing 101.13

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Sloppy Writing 101.13
I have such a problem with some words. Read below.
-We sat down to do some paperwork and Jim wrinkled up his nose.
-I’d be lucky if I go to some crappy community college.
-I could save up for some two year college. (This occurred right after the above sentence.)
-I’d tell them a good story about some vacation I took there.
Obviously the oft repeated word is some. Now I can’t just delete it in all cases, but I need to use a instead–it’s much cleaner. I found 142 occurrences of some in an old FROSTY ms, and quite a few of them can be deleted or replaced.
Some would be a good word used to distinguish a character from another by using it in their dialogue, but otherwise I would clean away the others.

5 Responses

  1. Rachel Schieffelbein

    For me it’s ‘just’ and (for some odd reason) ‘almost.’ Not only did my characters have things ‘almost’ happen to them, they even ‘almost’ felt things. IE: She felt almost crazy. *buries head in hands* How embarrassing.

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