Sloppy Writing 101.20
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Back to Sloppy Writing.
Another unnecessary word I’ve found is around. Sometimes I can take it out because of redundancy, other times because it’s not needed.
Here are my examples from an old version of FROSTY.
-The snow swirled around and my wet hair lashed at my face.
(Well yeah, swirl means it’s going around—this is redundant.)
-I looked around the room, then towards the fireplace, the orange and blue flames danced around.
(Note I used it twice. First one okay. Second one redundant—danced means moving around.)
-Brooke spun around on her heels.
(Again, spun around is redundant.)
-That I liked being moved around from home to home.
(I can take the around out and it doesn’t change the meaning at all.)
-They want to introduce me around.
(Removing around doesn’t change the meaning.)
So watch out for your arounds and get rid of the unnecessary and redundant ones.