Sloppy Writing 101.21

I already visited the use of there, so I thought why not here.

This time I used my WIP Chloe. I did a search and found only 30 heres. Not many, but after going through, I found about half were unnecessary.

The here is not needed in all the sentences below.

-I shouldn’t have come here tonight
-It’s so hard here without Brock.
-Do you want to stay out here a bit?

And check out what else I discovered.

-You tell Chloe yet how dinner here works. (Noah)
-Murph here seems to have lost his manners (Noah)
-This here is Elliot’s guardian angel. (Tisha)
-Chloe here is in agreement that our current president’s on the wrong path. (Elliot)

Three different people said the above 4 sentences. And note how they used here the same way. It’s unnecessary of course, but I realized I can use here as a word to make Noah’s voice more distinctive. So I’ll take it out of Elliot and Tisha’s dialogue, but Noah can have it.

And look at this one.

-Sasha closed here eyes and took a deep breath.

Obviously, this shouldn’t be here, it’s her. I found 2 times this occurred where spell check and my eyes did not pick it up.

So here isn’t a bad word, but sometimes it’s unnecessary. And sometimes you mean her when you typed here. Or at least it happened to me.

5 Responses

  1. Oh I’ve done the opposite when I used her instead of here and the sentence read something like, It’s really hot in her. And my cp was like… wow! Kinky! Lol.

  2. Rachel Schieffelbein

    Very interesting! I should search those words in mine. And ‘just.’ I know that’s a word I over use. I just can’t help myself. 😉

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