Sloppy Writing 101.21
I already visited the use of there, so I thought why not here.
This time I used my WIP Chloe. I did a search and found only 30 heres. Not many, but after going through, I found about half were unnecessary.
The here is not needed in all the sentences below.
-I shouldn’t have come here tonight
-It’s so hard here without Brock.
-Do you want to stay out here a bit?
And check out what else I discovered.
-You tell Chloe yet how dinner here works. (Noah)
-Murph here seems to have lost his manners (Noah)
-This here is Elliot’s guardian angel. (Tisha)
-Chloe here is in agreement that our current president’s on the wrong path. (Elliot)
Three different people said the above 4 sentences. And note how they used here the same way. It’s unnecessary of course, but I realized I can use here as a word to make Noah’s voice more distinctive. So I’ll take it out of Elliot and Tisha’s dialogue, but Noah can have it.
And look at this one.
-Sasha closed here eyes and took a deep breath.
Obviously, this shouldn’t be here, it’s her. I found 2 times this occurred where spell check and my eyes did not pick it up.
So here isn’t a bad word, but sometimes it’s unnecessary. And sometimes you mean her when you typed here. Or at least it happened to me.