So recently, I finished the first draft of my WIP Chloe. I’ve sent it off to a few betas, and am now making revisions because they were super fast. I also had the first 120 pages critiqued by Gabriela Lessa through our WIP coaching session. If you want more information on what we did, slide over to the right and hit WIP Coaching under my tag menu for all my posts. The critique was the last part of our coaching session.
Two things I learned. (Okay, more than that, but I’m talking bigger things.)
-I sometimes under-develop important scenes. So I need to give some more internalization by Chloe during and after the scene.
-My other problem is having a hard time recognizing when I’m telling. This is so much harder to do in your own work, and I know I’m not the only one with this problem.
One funny thing. When Gabriela read my first 50 pages (before I’d revised and submitted the 120), she found 2 problems. Murphy, the best friend, and Sasha, the girlfriend, weren’t developed well enough. Gabriela didn’t have any big reason to like them. No connection there.
When I resubmitted the 120, I knew what I’d done with Sasha wasn’t enough, but I still sent it off. And she called me on that. I should’ve trusted my instincts. So that’s another thing I need to fix.
My last big change also came due to her comments. I needed to move a few scenes back—something she had suggested earlier. But when I sent this ms off to her, the end wasn’t finished, and I didn’t know exactly where my first turning point would fall. Well, it fell too late, at about 40% in. So now I’m working on that too. It doesn’t affect things drastically, but I have to revise some scenes and do some other small additions. Luckily, it’s falling into place easily.
I’ve got some work to do, with everything from Gabriela and the other betas. The coaching session was a great help. It was great to get help from someone in the publishing industry, and she kept me on track and showed me many thing I hadn’t known. I learned a lot, and hopefully those things will carry over to my next WIP too.
If you haven’t been to Gabriela’s site, go check her out.