I have another interesting word I never thought would fall into Sloppy Writing.
Yes, that is right. I overused yes.
The problem came when someone asked a question. I always answered that question with a yes. Because I’m so polite. Then I’d tack on an additional statement. Problem is, most people would not use the yes, since it is implied in their answer.
Here are my examples from The Proper Way to Say Goodbye.
Question: “You sick?”
Answer: “Yes. I’m better now.”
Question: “Is that okay? Will you be my girlfriend?”
Answer: “Yes. I’d like that.”
Question: “First attempt?” He tried before?
Answer: “Yes. About a year ago.”
In all these occurrences, I could remove the yes because the question is answered with the next sentence. The one thing I did do is to keep Chloe, my mc, answering questions this way. To distinguish her voice. But everyone else… I got rid of those unnecessary yeses. And this goes for all the NOs too.
Did you ever think yes could be a sloppy word?