Sloppy Writing 101.26
Another word to watch out for is decide. Using decide distances the reader from the characters and should be avoided.
I don’t use a ton of decides, but after a search of The Proper Way to Say Goodbye, I found several I could delete to tighten my sentences. The interesting thing was that I didn’t overuse it with my main character. Meaning Chloe didn’t say, I decided to… a lot. More often, I used it in other people’s dialogue, and usually it was unnecessary.
Here are a few examples.
He should’ve been a freshman in college, but he decided to take a year off from school.
Revised: He should’ve been a freshman in college but took a year off from school.
Eventually we decided to meet and became friends.
Revised: Eventually we met and became friends.
I’m so glad you decided to join us.
Revised: I’m so glad you joined us.
I decided to play dumb.
Revised: I played dumb.
So watch out for unnecessary and/or overuse of decide.