Sloppy Writing 101.46
So I’m running out on the most obvious words to talk about. I’m sure there is more, I just have to take a good look at what I’ve done. Maybe plan ahead and not write this a few days before it’s supposed to go up.
The word I’ll talk about today is TURNED.
Originally when I searched The Proper Way to Say Goodbye for TURNEDs, I was looking for unnecessary ones.
-The pain flashed across her face as she turned and stuck the lasagna inside the oven.
Here the TURNED is not needed. It’s just an unnecessary stage direction. I can just say she put the lasagna in the oven, because the turning here isn’t important. So I had some like this, but I found another interesting thing.
A lot of times I used TURNED when I could probably find a more descriptive word.
-Her lips turned up in a smile.
How about rolled or curved or twitched or something. Let’s get a better word.
-My stomach turned.
Or maybe it heaved, quaked or soured. And I’m sure many people would use this occasion to insert a simile. I am horrible at similes, so I didn’t.
My point is: See if you can find better words than TURNED. One interesting thing I found during my search is how many different ways I used TURNED. It has several meanings. Maybe there’s more, but this is what I found.
Turn corner: change direction
Body turned: rotate
Stomach turned: queasy
Thoughts turned to: switched to
Attention turned to: changed
Turned down: refused
Looks like TURN can be used quite a few ways, huh. And in how many of those cases could I find a better word? I’m sure quite a few.
So my point is, not only is TURN sometimes an unnecessary word, often it is a bland word, let’s see if you can find a better one. (Where’s that thesaurus?)