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Sloppy Writing 101.48

February 8, 2013 by Suzi

So back to adverbs again. MOSTLY. I didn’t have a big problem with this one—only used it a few times unnecessarily. But when I did a search, I became aware that I needed to delete/change some because I didn’t want multiple characters using it.
But first, here are a couple examples from The Proper Way to Say Goodbye, where I took out an unnecessary MOSTLY.
-and I mostly stuck to myself, not talking to anyone.
-Her TV lay in a dark wooden shelf stuffed mostly with books and a vase of fake flowers.
And here are a few examples where I changed the mostly to a usually, which is the word Chloe used most often.
-but when I did, I mostly sat in the corner and listened to everybody else talk.

 -but now it was mostly Sasha, and it always ended before the kiss.
-Not like Brock who wore mostly black in high school, just to annoy Mom
So, is MOSTLY a problem for you ?


  1. Rachel Schieffelbein says:

    I’ve never searched for mostly, but I don’t think it’s one I have trouble with. I have done ‘ly’ searches, though. I realized I had a TON of them in one of my early mss, so I searched all my stuff. It’s funny how my early writings had so much more of these than my later writings, despite the fact that I didn’t consciously try to fix it. I know Stephen King wrote that it’s a confidence issue with new writers. I kinda’ think he’s right. :)

  2. I’ll have to do a search to know for sure, but I don’t remember using mostly much. Really seems more of a problem, for me. I’m going to search terms (I’ve got a list going) once I get the wonderful edits my very smart critique partners gave me done. :)

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