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  1. Fathers

    June 15, 2014 by Suzi

    Happy Father’s Day to all the dad’s out there. Including my own and my husband–both terrific dads.
     
    Most of the stories I write are young adult contemporary, and very often the fathers have a big part in the story.
     
    More often, they tend to be absent, which of course affects my mc’s life in a big way, but sometimes the dad is a positive role model.

    Image courtesy of digitalart / FreeDigitalPhotos.net

    The funny thing is with the ‘good’ dads, they don’t show up a lot throughout the story.
     
    I have one father that I love. A story about two teens, a dual pov between a boy and a girl, called Beyond the Wake. The boy’s father is abusive, and you hardly see him. But the girl’s father is involved with his kids’ life.
     
    And even though he works a lot and isn’t present for much of the story, when he’s around, he has a positive effect. And he plays a huge role in the growth of the boy–who has some issues to work through.
     
    As much as I like to have bad parents that help propel my story forward, I like seeing those good parents too.
     
    Do fathers play a big role in the stories you write?


  2. WIP The Movie Blog hop

    February 28, 2014 by Suzi

    Today is the movie blog hop where my MCs can be stars! I may be wrong, cause sometimes that happens, but I think this was the first blog hop I ever participated in, 2 years ago. And I pulled it together like last minute.

    Not this time. I started early. So thank you to Kyra Lennon and Rachel Schieffelbein for hosting this blog hop.

    So the point of this blog hop is to show the actors/actresses you’d cast in one of your WIPs. I’m going back in time to my very first YA story. I still love it today and will probably be going back to work on it. Maybe when I start querying my current WIP.

    This novel is called Beyond the Wake. Here’s a short blurb—and I apologize because it’s not query ready and therefore, may suck.

    Seventeen-year-old Jason is invited to spend the summer at the lake with his buddy Mack. He looks forward to the skiing, partying and girls. But when Jason unexpectedly falls for Mack’s younger sister, he has to decide if he can give up his partying ways to be the guy Alexis needs.

    Fifteen-year-old Alexis looks forward to swimming, the sun and catching up on her stack of unread books. When Jason shows an interest in her, she’s flattered and pleased that her brother, Mack, hates the idea of them dating. When Alexis learns Jason leads a different life than her, and she must decide if she’s willing to surrender her values for the guy she’s fallen for.

    And here are my choices for actors.

    Abigail Breslin is Alexis. She just has a sweet innocent look to me and is perfect for the roll.

    Julian Morris is Jason. This guy is probably a little old to be playing a teen, but he’s got the right look.

    Logan Lerman is the brother, Mack.

    So that’s it. Now go check out the other participants by going to Kyra’s site.


  3. First Fight / First Kiss – Day 2

    June 14, 2012 by Suzi

    Entertaining Interests

    Day two of The First Fight/First Kiss blog fest hosted by Danielle and Jackie.

    June 12 – Share with us your 1st FIGHT scene on your blog. It can be physical or verbal, fists or magic. Whichever you want to share.

    June 14 – Share with us your 1st KISS scene on your blog. It can be a peck on the cheek or a full fledge kissing session. Whatever you would like to tell us.

    Title: Beyond the Wake (WIP)
    A contemporary young adult novel.
    One summer. Two lives. Who will be the one to change?
    When 17 year old Jason unexpectedly falls for his best friend’s younger sister, he must decide if he can give up his partying ways to be the guy that Alexis needs. Fifteen year old Alexis is flattered by Jason’s attention, but as the summer progresses, she must decide if she’s willing to surrender her values for the guy she’s fallen for.

    Just a reminder. Day 1 was actually their first kiss and first fight. This is where they make up and have that special first kiss. It’s a little rough, since it’s waiting to be editing, but enjoy.

    Jason
    “Al, wait.” I grabbed her hand and pulled her towards the dock. I wasn’t going to let her go this time. “I need to talk to you.” We climbed into the boat, but when I sat next to her, she slid away, refusing to look at me. “Al, please. I’m sorry. Really. I’m sorry for getting drunk. It was dumb. I don’t do it all the time.”

    “You were drinking again tonight.” Her lips were pursed as she stared off toward the water.

    “Yeah, but just a few. I’m not drunk, not even buzzed.” She was making this so hard. “And I don’t smoke pot. That was the first time.”

    “Whatever.” She crossed her arms and squeezed her eyes shut.

    “I’m telling the truth. You can ask Mack. Sean offered it and I was curious. If I’d been sober, I probably wouldn’t have, but I did. And I’m sorry. Please, believe me.” She rolled her eyes. “You know I thought about what you said, about taking away what should’ve been a great memory. Instead of something special, I gave you a cheap forced kiss. And I get it. I was drunk and didn’t think. All night long I wanted to kiss you. Since we talked about it at the fair. The beer made me a little over eager. And I’m sorry. I’m sorry I ruined it for you.”

    She sighed and finally looked me in the eyes. I knew then she was going to forgive me. The relief spread.

    “I guess I missed out.” She offered a small smile.

    Huh?

    She bit down on her lip. “I was so uptight about the whole kiss thing, I didn’t get to enjoy it. And after what I heard, I probably should have.”

    “What do you mean?

    “Randi said that Tangi said that you were the best kisser.”

    Holy shit. Best kisser? If Tangi said something to Al, I would kill her. “Tangi said what to you?”

    “Nothing to me. She told Randi, who told me.”

    Damnit. Two girls I’ve pissed off. One I’d had sex with. Both I’d refused. Alexis couldn’t know I’d slept with Tangi. “I don’t want to talk about Tangi.”

    “So are you a good kisser?”

    “Beats me. You want to find out?” My heart pounded. Was she as nervous as me? When I kissed her the other night, I just did it. But now I think she wanted me to kiss her. What if she didn’t like it? What if I have beer breath? This is so much easier when you’re drunk.

    Her smile was her answer.

    I leaned in and pulled her head to mine and kissed her. Not a hot and heavy make out kiss. No tongue. No hand under her shirt. Just a kiss. A nice sweet kiss.

    “So?” I asked, holding my breath.

    She nodded and I kissed her again. And then a third time.

    Alexis sat back and stared into my eyes for what seemed like forever. Then jumped up and pulled on my hand. “Come on.” She climbed out of the boat and waited for me.

    “Where are we going?” I wanted to stay in the boat. I wanted to stare into her dark brown eyes. I wanted to kiss her some more. But that was enough for her. She’d gone as far as she could right now.

    “Let’s go swing.”

    We rocked back and forth silently, her head on my shoulder. I longed to her kiss again, but I knew we were done for tonight. After ten minutes she stood. “I’m going to bed. Goodnight, Jason.”

    I sat out by myself a while longer to give her some space. Maybe she was in there thinking about our kiss. Hopefully she was smiling. After twenty minutes, I went inside and bushed my teeth. She was already sleeping, and I climbed in to bed.

    And just for those of you who really dislike Jason–I have to explain that he didn’t cheat on Alexis. The other girls came before her, but he’s worried that she will think less of him if she knew the truth.


  4. First Fight / First Kiss Blogfest – Day 1

    June 12, 2012 by Suzi

    Entertaining InterestsDay one of The First Fight/First Kiss blog fest hosted by Danielle and Jackie.

    June 12 – Share with us your 1st FIGHT scene on your blog. It can be physical or verbal, fists or magic. Whichever you want to share.

    June 14 – Share with us your 1st KISS scene on your blog. It can be a peck on the cheek or a full fledge kissing session. Whatever you would like to tell us.

    Title: Beyond the Wake (WIP)
    A contemporary young adult novel.
    One summer. Two lives. Who will be the one to change?
    When 17 year old Jason unexpectedly falls for his best friend’s younger sister, he must decide if he can give up his partying ways to be the guy that Alexis needs. Fifteen year old Alexis is flattered by Jason’s attention, but as the summer progresses, she must decide if she’s willing to surrender her values for the guy she’s fallen for.

    I’ve actually got something unusual. Their first kiss is also their first fight. It’s a little rough, but here it is.

    Alexis
    I checked my cell, close enough, it was twelve forty-five. I was standing with a few girls, just listening. Nobody was really talking to me. Where was Jason? He’d ditched me not long after smoking the marijuana. There he was.

    I tugged on Jason’s arm. “Let’s go to the car. It’s time to go.” Mack was nowhere to be found, but I’d try calling him once we got to the car.

    The night was cool, and I was glad to escape the blaring music and drunks. Jason jabbered on, but I didn’t listen. Did he drink like this all the time? And the pot—how could he have smoked pot?

    I opened up the door and the bright yellow light spilled everywhere. I stopped when I saw Mack on top of Kelsey. My eyes slammed shut, but not before she looked up at me.

    “You dog, Mack!” Jason laughed and slammed the door.

    Oh no. Oh no. Oh no. I had not just seen that.

    Naked. Having sex in Dad’s SUV.

    What was wrong with him? Gross. I could never sit in that back seat again. My feet couldn’t get away fast enough.

    “Al… Al. Slow down, where you going?”

    Where was I going? I had to get away. How could I ever face Mack again? Damn him.

    Jason caught up with me and put his hands on my shoulders. “Hey, I told you to wait.” His arms wrapped around me, and he kissed me. Hard and sloppy, his tongue trying to jam into my mouth. My stomach turned at the taste of beer and marijuana.

    This wasn’t real.

    I pushed him backwards as hard as I could.

    “Hey, what are you doing?”

    This was the worst night of my life. The tears spilled down my face. “You ignored me all night long. You left me with all these stupid drunks. Then we see my brother having sex and you get turned on and kiss me. That’s gross, Jason. And you’re so drunk or high, you can hardly walk. I can’t believe you ruined my first kiss ever.” I wiped my eyes. How could he do this to me? I just wanted to go home.

    Jason
    My mind froze at her tears. She wanted me to kiss her. We just never found the right time. What was wrong? Why was she crying? My mind was a blank.

    I reached out to grab her arm. Her eyes widened as the tears continued to stream down her face. “Don’t touch me!” She stepped around me and went to the corner of the barn. Her shoulders slumped as she leaned into the wall.

    What did I do?

    My phone beeped. Mack was done. “He’s ready to go,” I said and followed Alexis to the car.

    Mack sat in back, eyes closed, head tilted back. I climbed in front and leaned my head against the cool window.

    Alexis refused to look at me and gripped the steering wheel, her face tight. I screwed up but didn’t know why.

    Why didn’t she want me to kiss her? Why was she so mad? Her words flew through my head, but everything was too muddled to make sense.


  5. Dust It Off Blog Hop

    May 7, 2012 by Suzi

    This is the 3nd day of the Dust it Off blog hop, hosted by Cortney Pearson and Theresa Paulo. Check out their sites for the rules.

    Title: Beyond the Wake
    Genre: Young Adult Contemporary
    Words: 93,000 (yes, cutting is needed)
    Status: Waiting to be revised

    What I learned

    Wow. What did I learn? A lot.

    First, that I loved YA—something I hadn’t read since probably my teen years.

    I also started to learn a little about what agents are looking for.

    Originally, this was Alexis’ story. But then I wrote Jason’s side. Then combined the two and I had a 125,000 contemporary young adult novel.

    Yeah, not gonna work… Especially for a debut author.

    I had to take out a major storyline, which I still hope to use some day, and then I was down to only one climax, instead of two (one for each character.) And then more cutting.

    Right now I’m at 95,000 words but haven’t done any serious editing. And by serious I mean stuff I’ve learned in the last six months about tightening your writing and plotting elements, which I didn’t know when I wrote this.

    I absolutely love this story and its characters because it shows that you should never give up on the troubled kid, because he can change, especially when given some love and direction by caring parents—even if they are not his.

    I’m excited to get back into it and this blog hop has given me the motivation to do so. My next step is to look for a beta or two that might help out. This is definitely a project I want to see finished.


  6. Random stuff

    May 6, 2012 by Suzi

    So there are so many blog hops and contests going on, I’ve kinda gotten out of schedule. I’ve skipped Sloppy Writing two times, but will get back this week.

    I also have a WIP Coaching post, which I’ll get to next week, because I had my last Skype session with Gabriela. And now it’s up to me to do some more work.
    I’m going to use today just to say thanks to a few people. I’ve been pretty lucky the last few weeks and have won a few blog contests. I’m not sure why it hits all at once, but it did.

    Amy Sonnichsen was celebrating her almost 300th follower (I think she’s at 319 last time I checked) and her birthday. I was randomly picked to win a 10 page ms critique, which I will be sending her sometime soon. So thank you, Amy.

    Blog Hops are so much fun—I’m just learning this. I’ve only participated in a few, but have sighed up for more. The Dust It Off Blog hop is going on now, the Oh those High School Dances on May 9th, the First Loves Blogfest on May 14th and then the First Fight/First Kiss Blogfest on June 12th/14th. Whew-lots to prepare.

    But anyway, last week was the Oh! My Hero Blop Hop hosted by Jaycee and Victoria, who picked me as her winner. Yay! My prize was a book and I picked WITH OR WITHOUT YOU by Brian Farrey. So now I’ve got another book on my Kindle to read. So thank you to Victoria.

    Lastly but not least, Christa Desir had an interview with K.M. Walton author of CRACKED and she gave away a copy, which I won. (once again randomly chosen.) Make sure you check out Christa’s site too because her book TRAINWRECK is coming out in 2013 and it sounds fascinating. So thank you Christa too.

    As I said, I’ve been lucky these last few weeks, so thank you to everyone.

    The next big thing is The Writer’s Voice contest, which started last week. I was lucky to get in as the spots filled up fast, and it’ll be fun to see what happens. My entry for FROSTY is a few posts down. And check out any of these ladies sites to see how The Writer’s Voice Contest works: Krista, Cupid, Monica, and Brenda.

    Happy Sunday.


  7. Dust It Off Blog Hop

    May 5, 2012 by Suzi

    If you’re looking for The Writer’s Voice, click here.

    The Dust it off 3 day blog hop starts today, hosted by Cortney Pearson and Theresa Paulo. Check out their sites for the rules and to find the other participants.

     
    Title: Beyond the Wake
    Genre: Young Adult Contemporary
    Words: 93,000 (yes, cutting is needed)
    Status: Waiting to be revised
     
    Yes, it needs some more work, but here you go…
     

    Alexis was floating out in the water. Her long legs stretched out, her nose in a book.

    All day she ignored me. I had to talk to her. I had to explain. “Can I talk to you for a minute?”

    She didn’t look up. “I’m busy.” Her tone said, go away.

    “Please, Al, we need to talk.”

    She sighed and slammed the book shut, then paddled over to me. I sat down on the dock and stuck my feet in the cool water.

    “What do you want?”

    I cringed at the harshness in her voice. There were so many things I wanted to say, but my brain wouldn’t work, almost as if I were still drunk. “I’m sorry.”

    “For what?” She scowled. “Do you even remember anything from last night?” Her eyes flared with anger.

    “Yes. Everything.” How could I forget? The anger. The disappointment on her face. The tears.

    “So what are you sorry for? Are you sorry because you ditched me and left me alone to fend for myself with people who were rude and drunk? Or are you sorry I found out you’re a pothead?”

    I opened my mouth to defend myself. It was the first time.

    She waved her book in the air. “Or are you sorry that you took what was supposed to be special. My first kiss with you… with anyone. And you turned it into something trashy?” She took a deep raspy breath. “I don’t like this side of you. I don’t like you when you’re drunk and I can’t date a pothead.” The tears welled up in her eyes. “I can’t see you anymore.” She blinked hard and paddled in to shore.

    The door to the cabin slammed. Dammit. What the hell was wrong with me?

    Her words repeated in my head. I took something from her. Her first kiss. I couldn’t even remember mine, who or when it was. But I wasn’t a girl.

    Girls were sappy. Girls liked romance. Girls remembered their first kiss and wanted it to be special. She hadn’t wanted me to kiss her then. When I was drunk and high. I didn’t even ask. And she was the type of girl you needed to ask.

    I was such a screw-up.


  8. Dust it Off Blog Hop

    May 3, 2012 by Suzi

    The 3 day Dust It Off Blog Hop starts today, hosted by Cortney Pearson and Theresa Paulo. Check out their sites for the rules and to find the other participants.

    From Theresa’ site: We’ve all had those manuscripts that we poured our heart into, fell in love with the characters and still think of them at random, but unfortunately had to shelf. Now it’s time for a little spring cleaning. Take out those manuscripts and Dust It Off!

    Title: Beyond the Wake
    Genre: Young Adult Contemporary
    Words: 93,000 (yes, cutting is needed)
    Status: Waiting to be revised

    One summer. Two lives. Who will be the one to change?

    When seventeen year old Jason unexpectedly falls for his best friend’s younger sister, he must decide if he can give up his partying ways to be the guy that Alexis needs.

    Fifteen year old Alexis is flattered by Jason’s attention, but as the summer progresses, she must decide if she’s willing to surrender her values for the guy she’s fallen for.
    Check back on the 5th and the 7th for the rest of the Blog Hop. I’ll be posting an excerpt and what I learned with this project.