The Writer’s Voice #48

This is my submission for The Writer’s Voice. Thank you to these wonderful ladies for their hard work: Krista, Cupid, Monica, Brenda, and Kimberly.   Title: The Proper Way to Say Goodbye Genre: Contemporary Young Adult Word Count: 66,000 words   Query:   Only one person knew Chloe was gay, and his love and support…
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Sloppy Writing 101.53

  To be verbs. They always show up on the list of words you should avoid. To be verbs can often make a sentence weak or passive. And many sentences can be improved by using a stronger verb. A more descriptive word.   So the ones you want to look for are: is/am/are/was/were/be/been/being. Here are…
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Sloppy Writing 101.52

I’ve got a word to watch for that I’m sure some will be surprised about. WHEN. I’ve seen a few writers’ blogs talk about this, and once I started to look at my manuscript, I could kinda see it.   The problem with WHEN is, sometimes it turns a sentence into a telling sentence. Take…
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Sloppy Writing 101.51

Last week I talked about how I was overusing the word MADE when I could be using so much better words. So I’ll do another along that line. GET.   So sometimes I could just delete the GET because it was unnecessary. I tightened my sentence. No, it’s really not a lot of words, but…
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Sloppy Writing 101.50

MADE is one of those words that can often be replaced by something better, more descriptive. So I went and checked The Proper Way to Say Goodbye for my MADEs and made lots of changes.   -Sasha made introductions, but the names didn’t stick. Why am I using made introductions when I can just use…
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